Hi Katelynn! I just wanted to thank you for your your comment on my story about Ramphinistus the other week! I appreciated your honesty about not usually enjoying rhyming works but that mine was easy to follow! I wanted to make it not complicated and you showed me that my goal was reached! So thank you again!
I was just reading back through the comments on my Comment Wall, and wanted to thank you for the feedback you gave me! I really appreciate the suggestions you made in regards to the format of my pages. Even though it is helpful to have feedback on the stories themselves, it is also useful to get comments on how things look. Thanks again!
Hey Katelynn! I wanted to thank you for your comment on my Ancient Egyptian Myths and Legends essay. Ever since you stated that you couldn't tell whether I actually liked the unit or not I have changed up the way I write my essays. I always want people to know whether I recommend the unit or not so now I will say at the end of my essays. I'll also chose a single side (liking it/disliking it) and write with that side in mind. So, again, thank you very much for your feedback! Have a great weekend!
Katelynn, I really enjoyed exploring and reading your portfolio! I, of course, loved the first storytelling post you chose since it was Aladdin. It has been a while since I have seen the movie. Therefore, reading your author’s note had helped me some. I liked how you stuck with the original plot, since this story was already so great why change it?! I thought it was a great idea, starting more in the midst of the action instead of taking the whole story to lead up to the actual storyline. I think you included just the right amount of background information so the audience was not lost, yet entertained. For your second storytelling post, I specifically enjoyed the style you chose. I love writing and reading diary posts. You’re right; it gives more insight and detail. I would agree with you that while the ending is unfortunate, that symbolizes her identity as the ‘child of ill luck’. I think maybe if you added a time period for the diaries that would help the storyline. The diary posts drastically change from choosing the beggar to marry to the girl not being able to see her husband for weeks and then years. It leaves the reader kind of confused, what happened to him so suddenly? Other than that, I really enjoyed reading your stories! Hope this helps!
Hi, Katelynn! I really like the stories you've written for your portfolio. First, I like the storytelling element you added to the story about Anansi - I also read the West African Folktales (it was actually one of my favorite units) so I really liked seeing it retold, especially since you added your own little moral with Charlotte tricking her father. I also thought the interaction between Charlotte was super cute - this is the sort of fun, non-graphic story that I could see telling as a bed time story. Next, I think the diary format for the other story was perfect because it allowed me as the reader to put myself in the place of someone with really bad luck. I can't believe how strong she was even in the midst of all of her misfortune. Even though she had the worst luck, she never gave up hope that it would be changed. However, I think you're right that the death of the girl at the end of the story sends a strong message about making our own luck. The girl was hoping that her husband would be the one to change her luck and I think it's important to know that we can't just depend on someone else to be our lucky break! I can't wait to read more of your stories! Great job!
Hi Katelynn, I just wanted to say thank you for your comment on my storybook back in October. You provided some very good constructive criticism and I actually did make some of the changes you recommended. Not many people say things they think are out of place so I'm glad you did!
Thank you for commenting on my story about the envious neighbor. I think the most helpful part of your comment was that my language added to the overall story. That was not something I considered when I wrote it. I put myself in the place of the dog and wrote it how I thought, so I am so glad you thought the language added to the story!
Hi Katelynn! I just wanted to thank you for your your comment on my story about Ramphinistus the other week! I appreciated your honesty about not usually enjoying rhyming works but that mine was easy to follow! I wanted to make it not complicated and you showed me that my goal was reached! So thank you again!
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ReplyDeleteI was just reading back through the comments on my Comment Wall, and wanted to thank you for the feedback you gave me! I really appreciate the suggestions you made in regards to the format of my pages. Even though it is helpful to have feedback on the stories themselves, it is also useful to get comments on how things look. Thanks again!
Hey Katelynn! I wanted to thank you for your comment on my Ancient Egyptian Myths and Legends essay. Ever since you stated that you couldn't tell whether I actually liked the unit or not I have changed up the way I write my essays. I always want people to know whether I recommend the unit or not so now I will say at the end of my essays. I'll also chose a single side (liking it/disliking it) and write with that side in mind. So, again, thank you very much for your feedback! Have a great weekend!
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ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed exploring and reading your portfolio! I, of course, loved the first storytelling post you chose since it was Aladdin. It has been a while since I have seen the movie. Therefore, reading your author’s note had helped me some. I liked how you stuck with the original plot, since this story was already so great why change it?! I thought it was a great idea, starting more in the midst of the action instead of taking the whole story to lead up to the actual storyline. I think you included just the right amount of background information so the audience was not lost, yet entertained.
For your second storytelling post, I specifically enjoyed the style you chose. I love writing and reading diary posts. You’re right; it gives more insight and detail. I would agree with you that while the ending is unfortunate, that symbolizes her identity as the ‘child of ill luck’. I think maybe if you added a time period for the diaries that would help the storyline. The diary posts drastically change from choosing the beggar to marry to the girl not being able to see her husband for weeks and then years. It leaves the reader kind of confused, what happened to him so suddenly?
Other than that, I really enjoyed reading your stories! Hope this helps!
Hi, Katelynn! I really like the stories you've written for your portfolio. First, I like the storytelling element you added to the story about Anansi - I also read the West African Folktales (it was actually one of my favorite units) so I really liked seeing it retold, especially since you added your own little moral with Charlotte tricking her father. I also thought the interaction between Charlotte was super cute - this is the sort of fun, non-graphic story that I could see telling as a bed time story. Next, I think the diary format for the other story was perfect because it allowed me as the reader to put myself in the place of someone with really bad luck. I can't believe how strong she was even in the midst of all of her misfortune. Even though she had the worst luck, she never gave up hope that it would be changed. However, I think you're right that the death of the girl at the end of the story sends a strong message about making our own luck. The girl was hoping that her husband would be the one to change her luck and I think it's important to know that we can't just depend on someone else to be our lucky break! I can't wait to read more of your stories! Great job!
ReplyDeleteHi Katelynn, I just wanted to say thank you for your comment on my storybook back in October. You provided some very good constructive criticism and I actually did make some of the changes you recommended. Not many people say things they think are out of place so I'm glad you did!
ReplyDeleteHi Katelynn,
ReplyDeleteThank you for your comment on my storytelling post. I'm glad you liked it!
Thank you for commenting on my story about the envious neighbor. I think the most helpful part of your comment was that my language added to the overall story. That was not something I considered when I wrote it. I put myself in the place of the dog and wrote it how I thought, so I am so glad you thought the language added to the story!
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